Embrace the 5-point essay format.
Here’s a trusty format that you can make your own:
1st paragraph: These four or five sentences should “catch” the reader’s attention.
3-4 body paragraphs: Use these paragraphs to reveal who you are. Ideally, one of these paragraphs will reflect clinical understanding and one will reflect service.
Concluding paragraph: The strongest conclusion reflects the beginning of your essay, gives a brief summary of you are, and ends with a challenge for the future.
I need it to be rewritten in this format and reduced to 900 words as well as help with proper sentences structure and grammar. Help with keeping relevant information and not to seem as if I am rambling on. And a strong conclusion I feel like mine is weak however I need the paper to keep the main ideas.