The story about you, your sister and the nursing
home is what we want to read to about, tell like a story with the
dialogue that you have, descriptive details, a beginning, middle and
end.” after you edit my essay make sure it comes up to 6/7 pages in
total(already have 4 pages). for page1, change the title that fits my
essay but not the personal narrative draft. for page2, the fourth line
start with the “Girl, listen to me”, professor left a comment “Start
with this, this will draw your reader in to your story.” i guess she
wants me to make a new paragraph? but not sure.